Evaluation
Class Evaluation
WWW- Used the rules well for example Shot/Reverse/Shot of Armond, and Kyle staring at each other. It was suspenseful. The music worked really well, as it was parallel. The narrative was good. The 180˚ rule wasn't broken. The song used was fit for purpose, and attention to detail was on point. Kyle's walk was more natural. It was very original and well planned, the editing program was used to the best ability, well planned, and a variety of shots was used. The editing of the bag was good. The production creates enigma codes.
EBI- The camera was shaky and a few shots blurred. The camera work needs improvement. There was some background noise, and items in the shot did not match the narrative.
Self-Evaluation
WWW-Our planning was done to every last shot, and in the end we had 22 shots. The shots list helped us keep track of what we needed to do next, and how long each should be approximately. On the shots list we were going to an extreme close up of the eyes, but that was scrapped due to the camera being to close, and the actual presentation of the eyes being uneven, so we decided to use a close up of the face of Armond, to show his facial expressions as impatient, also the repeated close up shots of the fingers tapping on the desk added to the sense of waiting, and growing impatience. This created an enigma code of what he is waiting for, and surfaces an essence of suspense. The close up on Kyle’s shoes whilst he is walking up the stairs, creates another of Roland Barthes enigma codes, as we do not show his face till he enters the room, so it makes us ask ourselves who is he? The pan of the bag presents yet another enigma code of what is in the bag? As Kyle opens the door we were able to incorporate in a man-on-action shot, which was done effectively. When Kyle sits down at the table we see long shot of both Kyle and Armond staring at each other, this presents binary oppositions, but not identifying who is who. We use a Shot/Reverse/Shot to show both actors expressions to be serious, and it was effective, and the shot was done well on the whole. There are a few lines of dialogue, which are simple, and don’t give away the whole narrative. There is yet another Man-on-action shot where Armond’s hand where he goes to the bag and brings it closer to him, at this point the suspense is increasing as the contents of the bag, which is also a macguffin, is going to be revealed, however the suspense is left as a cliff hanger, this is due the moment when the bag is opened, but it fades to black, which was used effectively. Furthermore, the 180˚ rule was not broken, and made the video more effective. There was Non-diegetic music being used, but it sounded parallel, as the shot of the clock ticking made it sound diegetic. The clock ticking and the line in the song “I’m coming” made it parallel.
EBI- Next time, in the task we could pay more attention to detail on certain aspects of Mise-en-scene. This is due to the fact the costume could have been more darker, on the antagonist, and more lighter in the protagonist, so the binary opposition could be more effective, and seen better. Another aspect of Mise-en-scene we could have focused on was the setting, as in the background we could see objects that shouldn't have been there like boxes on top of the cabinets, next time we could either move the boxes or cover them to make them look more mysterious and create another enigma code. Furthermore, we could have paid attention to the effect of lighting, and there reflections, as in the medium shot of the door we could see Armond actually filming in the door window. Another area is the sound during dialogue; we could hear people talking, so it took away the effect of being more realistic. The main area we need to improve on is the cinematography, this is because the camera was shaking throughout the whole clip, which made it look amateur, next time we can use a tripod.
Teacher Evaluation:
WWW:
Sound and music were effective, especially with the sound of the clock in sync with the clock in the scene. This made the clock sound originally seem diegetic and in the scene however when the music progressed we realised it was non diegetic. It was also parallel and complimented the scene well.
An enigma code was effectively created as the identities of the characters were unknown. A clear enigma code was also created by the mysterious bag as the audience wonders what's inside.
The low angle shot of Armond in the close up of his face was effective as it made him seem more menacing and mean.
The dialogue and scripting was good as speech was clear and easy to understand.
The repeated shot of the close up on Armond's fingers was effective as it built tension and suspense.
Match on Action was also performed effectively in the scene of the door being opened and then shot from the other side showing the other character entering the door.
Editing was also effective as the fade out of music helped the scenes flow.
EBI:
There was some unintentional camera wobble and blur in scenes which made them less realistic and appealing to the audience.
The location of the scene could also have been better as the mise en scene did not suit the contents of the scene as books and posters were clearly scene, whereas dealing between two mysterious characters would have suited a more isolated, mysterious location.
There was also some unintentional diegetic sound in the background of the scenes. This took some emphasis away from the music and speech between the characters as background noises distracted the audience.
Preliminary Results:
Creativity - 4/5
Use of technology - 4/5
Production process - 4/5
Codes and conventions - 4/5
Fit for purpose - 4/5
Attention to detail - 4/5
